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Today's teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generations. Discuss this view and give your own opinion

#teenagers #lives #generations
Over the
last
 two or three decades, mankind has been suffering
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 issues
tremendously
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 than ever before, especially in
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adolescents. At present's
teens
 have enormous stressful
lives
 than past periods due to the competition. I strongly agree with
this
 statement and
this
 essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons. To commence with, today's teenagers
face
 numerous
strees
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stress
 in their
live
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 because they should be competitive to others for each every situation
such
 as studies and works.
In other words
,
teens
 have a plethora of responsibilities to do in their
teenager
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 time, they should be focused on their education,
therefore
, they would be gotten
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fair employment,
always
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 is decided by the
teens
 period.
For example
, a recent report by the Times of India said that more than 70% of
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adolescents suffer depression in
this
 present era,
as a result
, some might be
suicided
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 themselves.
Therefore
,
teens
 are living their
lives
 with
stress
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more stress
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 than previous generations.
Furthermore
, teenagers life is more difficult because
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 age only they have to do anything themselves without
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to
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their parents while they have a multitude of stress.
For instance
, in Western nation's
teens
 are faced innumerable depression
to
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 their everyday life due to
they
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stay
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 away from their parents when they are getting teenagers while they are always being stressful
lives
.
Hence
, they
face
deperssion
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depression
 enormously than
provious
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previous
 generations. To conclude,
teengers
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teenagers
face
 many problems in their
lives
 because they should be competitive
to
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 others for work and study; their decision might be wrong
in
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many times while they
face
streesful
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stressful
lives
,
therefore
, I strongly agree with
this
 statement in the above-mentioned details and I hope
this
 process is conducive to building a healthy society across the world.
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