Some people say that it is better for children to grow up in a city, while others say that growing up in the countryside is better. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.
In today's world, the different level of each youngster's well-being is a controversial issue that some
people
are discussing that it may have something to do with the living area. Some individuals believe such
children
who have grown in a city
may have a better life, conversely
there are others who think in the opposite. Add a comma
,conversely
However
, it is disagreed
that Change to the active voice
disagrees
has disagreed
children
will have a better life if they grow up in a city
rather than the countryside
, and we will explain now.
Firstly
, the lower volume of public facilities in the countryside
cannot be considered to cause only a negative impact, since it also
makes the children
in such
area have more potential to deal with their own problems than one who growing up in a city
. For instance
, countryside
-youngster have more percentage to do something by themself like walking or cycling to school. On the other hand
, this
rarely happened with urban children
due to a lot of public services such
as the metro, bus, and taxi which make those young people
unfamiliar to do something by themself. Therefore
, it is better for such
adolescents who are born in out
town.
Correct your spelling
our
Secondly
, as it is a common thing in the non-urban areas that internet still
not able to enter in some parts of them, Add a missing verb
is still
this
leads young people
to get far off from phone, namely social media
. For example
, children
who use less social media
generally bend their attention to the lessons or school activities, and that cause a lot more advantages to people
of such
ages. This
may illustrate that growing in the countryside
may make it easier for those youngsters to catch up with their academic works,
since it has less interruption Remove the comma
apply
such
as social media
. As a result
, this
may lead to higher grades and more experiences in an
extracurricular Correct article usage
apply
activity
.
To sum up, it is not rather excessive to claim that growing up in a non-urban area is better for adolescents because it makes them be able to cope with something by themself and have less time addicted to social Fix the agreement mistake
activities
media
. In the long run, if the public services and the internet system in the countryside
were developed in the same standard as in s city
, this
point of view might be considered to change.Submitted by littlesenile on
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