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In some countries, using the internet in schools is getting more popular. Is this a positive or negative development?

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As national barriers are slowly being broken down through trade, integration, and technology various organisations in society are being influenced especially by the
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. Nowadays practically all academic institutions are connected. Whether
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, there is ample evidence to suggest the benefits of the
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 are increasing, especially related to an academic environment.
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 is because when a school is connected they have faster access to more information.
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, it can bestow increases
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, in certain schools across the UK matters
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, it is clear that being connected to the world wide web entails positive implications. 
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, being connected to the
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 has grave dangers and could even lead to an overreliance.
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 into the habit of consulting 'Google' for answers may be argued as putting too much faith into the hands of technology companies.
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 it is not difficult to tamper with search engine rankings.
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 the over-reliance on technology
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 of traditional knowledge could be questioned.  To conclude, there are both negative and positive aspects to consider,
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 due to the wealth of information, the conveniences that have been gained so far, I am strong of the opinion that school
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 connectivity is a positive development.
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