A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts.It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter * Describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team * Summarize the benefits of paying for the concerts * Say how you think the company should spend the money

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Dear Sir, I am writing

this

letter to explain in which ways you would obtain

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positive feedback from the general public.

Firstly

sponoring

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sponsoring

a sport children’s team could increase the number of visitors,

for

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families and friends, and

also

the development level of the team. We could display the advertisement campaign during challenging the competition.

Secondly

, we have another alternative option which is paying for the concert.

This

choice could be a great advantage

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because a lot of people could be

beneficited

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benefited

from it.

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, we could hire a local musician band in support of the community and society.

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, we could offer some kind of gratuitous item in order to promote our company at the same time. Both of them put forward valid points,

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, I believe that

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sponsoring a local children’s

sport

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team could benefit our company in the

long-run

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herewith the gratitude from

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society. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Faithfully, X

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