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Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given bar chart describes information about the three living troubles of various seven
cities
 in British in 2008, units are measured in percentages. Overall,
health
 services had the major issues
in
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during these all
cities
 while
air
pollution
 was the least trouble in these
cities
 in the Uk. According to the graph illustrates, Belfast had the major
health
 service trouble, with an average of just below three fifths while
education
 and training
was
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 just above half,
air
pollution
 problem was only 7%.
In contrast
, Manchester had faced the highest amount of
air
pollution
 to compared the other
cities
, with an average of 15 per cent while
health
 service and
education
 and training had 51 and 45% respectively. Newcastle was the least
of
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air
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pollution
 problem, which is around 5%, but
other
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 two major problems had over two fifths. In London had suffered almost the same amount of
education
 and
health
 troubles, which is just over half, but 14% was
air
pollution
. In terms of, Birmingham
was faced
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 the majority issue of
health
, with an average of 55% while
air
pollution
 was the least, which is around 9 per cent. In Glasgow,
education
 and training
was
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 suffered the highest issue, with an average of 53% and
health
 service was just below half while 9% was
air
pollution
.
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