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Some experts believe that it is outweigh disadvantages better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays,
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 generation. Some specialists argue that primary
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each argumentations examples. Perhaps studying
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 have to learn several subjects
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 of study and could affect their mental growth because they need sufficient
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 are in their golden ages of learning where they have a super sponges brain that
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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