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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
In recent years, shopping online through Internet-based applications
such
 as Amazon or Shopee has developed on a global scale, leading to many people believing that soon or later, every shop in both urban and rural areas would register in online selling models. From my perspective, I'm completely inclined towards
this
 idea. One evident benefit from selling
products
 online is the sales increasement. Because of the delivery to even the far-distanced places, the revenue of shops now doesn't come from only the
customers
 who live nearby, but
also
 from the
customers
 who might live in different cities, towns or countries.
For instance
, nowadays, thanks to the advancement of technology, people from India can buy things that catch their eyes
although
 those things are from Vietnam. Another reason supporting why
this
 idea may come true is that selling
products
 online costs less than direct selling. In order to sell directly to
customers
, running a shop would play a vital role and
also
 require the owner to pay facility costs, staff salaries and other monetary conditions while selling online
products
 may just need a mobile phone and the
products
.
For example
, one person can just post a picture of her
products
 on social networking sites like Facebook or Instagram and she will have normal
customers
 just like a shop. In conclusion, with the ever-accelerating number of people using high-tech devices today, it's reasonable to believe in the growth of online shopping will one day cover all shops in towns and cities.
Although
this
 idea has its particular downsides, it's still a positive development because of its convenience to online
customers
 and
also
 the monetary benefits to shops' owners.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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