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The provided charts delineate the change of home in one country from 1920 to 2019 concerning the possession of home appliances and housework time.

The provided charts delineate the change of home in one country from 1920 to 2019 concerning the possession of home appliances and housework time.
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The provided charts delineate the changes
of
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 home about the possession of home appliances and housework time in one country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
, the percentage of three appliances displayed an upward trend, and the proportion of refrigerators increased dramatically. Meanwhile, household work time displayed a downward trend, except for one period.
According to
 the above chart, the proportion of refrigerators was
initially
 very small.
However
, it soared between 1920 and 1980, and all homes possessed
the
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 refrigerator in 1980,
which
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and
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this
 proportion remained the same in the rest period. The percentage of
the
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home that had vacuum cleaners began by precisely 30%, and it had grown progressively to 2000,
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which
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when
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 all households owned
the
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a
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 cleaner. The percentage of washing
machine
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machines
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 showed some fluctuations, but it
finally
 rises
at
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 well over 20% compared with 1920. In terms of household work time, in 1920, it showed precisely 50
hours
, but the
hours
 decreased progressively from 1920 to 1980. The hour
of
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 1980 was around 15
hours
, and the amounts were unchanged
to
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 2000.
Lastly
,
this
 amounts decreased slightly just over 10
hours
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provided" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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