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The maps illustrate modifications in Youngsville in New Zealand over a 25 years period. We can see that the new design proposal involves making a number of developments in the town. Namely in the airport, River Alanah and railway
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. There is no change in old buildings
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 as hospital, school and The main rail
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. The most noticeable change is from the north of the map near the park, an enormous stadium was built
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 to the railway by destroying the old houses and including 2 big parking spots.
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, they provided other sports facilities to the park near the hospital,
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, most of the trees has vanished. By cutting down all the trees near school, they managed to create 2 industrial factories and a warehouse
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, In airport area, by logging the trees, other huge manufactures were constructed.
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 developments were beside the rail
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, in the south, fascinating skyscrapers were built by removing the old villas and
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 to the Alanah river, two regular warehouses were designed for storing the special equipment for manufactures,
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, There has been a Marina structure was built near the main railway
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