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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel and work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reason why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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 some part of society thinks that
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only migrants and working professionals should learn
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language
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, others claim the use of
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foreign
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 is versatile. In my ,opinion I believe that foreign
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 is a very strong tool for communication and development.
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, the world is becoming
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 community with the help of the internet. many peoples from across the world are coming together.
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 as the main subject.
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 to that people are migrating from
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 place to another often. so
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 think
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 should be a
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 tool for communication rather than a
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barrier
. any individual should learn a
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foreign
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 not just sake of travel or work but
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 should learn for personality development. for e.g, I want to
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collaborate
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a global
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 but because of the
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 could not. to understand
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the different
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culture
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 and traditions of any other country
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 should
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definitely
 learn different
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.
On the other hand
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, some masses think abroad
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 should only be
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useful
 for working professionals and travellers because there is no use of
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 for other
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individuals
 to learn
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instead
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 of spending time to learn foreign
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 they can that time on other learnings which help them to grow. In my opinion,
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 should definitely learn different
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 for better
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opportunities
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personal
 growth.in
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 think it will
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 improve our reading skills.and it should be considered as
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 activity for others To conclude, If anyone
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diffrent
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different
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languages
 they will probably get better
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opportunity
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however
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, it should
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