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Hi Wan Zhang, I'm writing
this
 letter to let you know that we decided not to move into the property (197 Thornbury Cres) on Feb 1st. We have been talking and negotiating with the other party over the whole week. It's
such
 a shame that we cannot reach an agreement on the
deposit
 return matters. We cannot accept the solution that the other party offered, as "the agent will post the ad for the property, and if they find a new tenant within
one
month
,
then
one
month
rent
($2100) will be returned to us; if they find a new tenant within two months,
then
 no
deposit
 will be returned to us, (which means we will lose $4200, all of the
rent
deposit
); if they find a new tenant within three months, we have to pay landlord another $2100(
one
month
's
rent
) as penalty or compensation."
This
 is not an acceptable solution to ask us for the
third
month
's
rent
.
Besides
, we find it
infringe
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 the right of us
as
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the tenants under the Residential Tenancies Act, 2006.
One
 term mentioned in the standard form of lease says that "the
rent
deposit
 cannot be more than
one
month
's
rent
 for
one
 rental period."
Therefore
, we'd like to have
one
month
's
rent
($2100) back. Thank you for your time. Regards, Chang & Aijie
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