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Should education and healthcare be free of charge and funded by the government, or should it be the responsibility of the people to pay for these services? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Access to
education
 and
healthcare
 are
two
 fundamental things that should be available to every human being. Some
people
 believe that every individual is responsible to pay for it by themselves whereas others believe it is the responsibility of the state to provide these
services
. In my
opinion
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 I strongly agree that these
two
 essential
services
 should be provided and funded by the
govenment
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government
 as it will lead to equal facilities for every citizen and reduce their financial burden.
First
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The first
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 reason why I agree with the government financing
education
 and
healthcare
 is that I think lead to our societies becoming more equal across classes as everyone will have the same facilities. When these
services
 are free of charge even the poorest of citizens will have the opportunities to get educated and access state of the art medical attention in times of need. If not
then
 quality
services
 will only be utilized by the rich and financially stable parts of the population whereas,the poor will not get any or will use sub-standard
services
.
This
 will
further
 increase the class divide.
For instance
, in many developed nations where these
services
 are free of
cost
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 the population is much happier and the crime rate goes down .
Thus
 I feel
education
 and
healthcare
 are
two
 fundamental
services
 that are a right of every citizen. Another reason why I believe that tuition and medical aid should be paid for by the state is that it will decrease the financial burden of citizens. When these
two
 aspects of life are taken care of by the government ,
people
 will be able to enjoy their financial freedom and start spending money which in return will be beneficial for the economy. Many a time
people
 are drowned in educational loans or are bankrupted by expensive medical treatments and spend the majority of life trying to pay back their debts.
For example
 in the USA
people
 are in a terrible financial position if they are hospitalized without insurance and lead a stressful life. So, to avoid
such
 situations these essential
services
 should be free of cost. In conclusion,state-funded
education
 and
healthcare
 will not only lead to an equal society but
also
 will reduce the financial burden of citizens which may in return help the economy. All countries in the world should strive to provide these facilities free of charge.
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