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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness? give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Happiness
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 is an essential part of the life of many who define
happiness
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 in different ways. In my opinion, the reasoning makes
people
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 to
happiness
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 which depend on various activities or satisfying feeling about what they really want. In the following paragraph, a reason to support my opinion will be discussed.
Although
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 many
people
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 think that definition of
happiness
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 is just only wealthy which many
people
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 will expect to rich in the future or love which make many moods, there are more reasons who define
happiness
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besides
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 wealth and love,
for instance
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, the top of position in their occupation so they can work all day for
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 success, some
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 like to respect by
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 around without the love and the success for some
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 is famous whom many citizens know about them. A determinant of achieving
happiness
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 is many methods.
Firstly
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, you must aim for a goal, which each
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 have a different, and set a certain time to finish the goal that you choose
such
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 as job, loving, financial statement, respect and being a famous person.
Secondly
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, improving personality is the essential key to success. If you cannot improve, you were not meet the goal easily.
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, if they cannot reach the goal,
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 they changed the goal for
happiness
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 which it is possible to do in that time. In conclusion, many
people
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 are distinct ideas about what is made to
happiness
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,
thus
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 they must find themselves. By doing
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, the goals, which each
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 aim, are close to reality and
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 is the right way for
people
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 in achieving
happiness
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 and they can find the definition of
happiness
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 in their opinion.
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