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Because many children are not able to learn foreign language, schools should not force to learn foreign language. to what extend do you agree or disagree

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Since
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 of
children
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 face obstacles when learning foreign
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, schools should not
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 the offsprings learn
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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. Nowadays, many educational
centers
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 are emphasizing on teaching the
children
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a foreign
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a foreign language
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languages
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 supposing it will help in their future life
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 giving the new
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 may negatively affect on their grades from other subjects. I partially agree with the given statement. To commence, foreign
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 play a great role in building the fundamental background of
children
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 from a young age. At
first
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, it’s a good opportunity to meet the various cultures of the world and to have at least minor imagination about other nations.
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, knowing the additional
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 is a guarantee for
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 future as it creates a good job opportunity.
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, as much attention is put on teaching foreign
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 at school the pretty results will be visible after some decades.
On the other hand
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, there are myriad drawbacks to putting so much load at schools may lead to unpleasant changes
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 as losing the desire to learn knowledge at all.
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, the educational achievement from other subjects may significantly get worse because
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 will focus on the additional
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. To summarize, there are some merit and demerit to learning a foreign
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. It may create a good future for
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, whereas may make the stressful atmosphere to learn the other programs. In my opinion, it’s necessary to build
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 specialized schools in order to increase the coverage of teaching new
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