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More and more people are opting for ready-made food instead of freshly cooked food. Do this development has more advantages over disadvantages?

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In modern life, people seem to have many things on their to-do lists
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 as duties in jobs, something to learn, entertainment or hanging out with friends... In the limit of
time
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 resources, they tend to reduce to spend
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 in kitchens to make their
meals
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. Choosing fast foodstuff is one of the best choices for them to save
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.
However
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, I believe that eating ready-made
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 frequently is not recommended, which is not good for health. In
this
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 essay, some of my analyses will support my opinion.
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 with, young generations prefer to buy foodstuff for their eatings than cook for that because cooking is not their priority activity. In modern society, studying new knowledge, making friends and spending
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 for entertainment are taken into account by the young.
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, nowadays, adolescents make appointments or celebrate their birthdays with their friends at KFC or Domino Pizza in which the
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 are always available, decorated suitably for their parties.
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, whereas cooked
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 are more nutrients, massively fast-food consumption will lead to bad effects on health, One of the examples is that many young people recently become obese or overweight. That
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 cause heart disease because instant
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 include many fat elements. In some recent surveys, more than 40% of US teenagers tend to become overweight. In conclusion, we should balance our
meals
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 by declining ready-made
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 and increasing cooked
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. Even though, instant
foods
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 will save our
time
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 their outbreak is more than their advantages.
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