Some people work for the same organisation all their working life other things that is is better to work for different organisation discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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company
how long time and others are
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many different companies and they change them
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in sometimes.In my view and other peoples view discuss in
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work
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how many benefits they
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multinational
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the multinational
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company
so they have job security and
life time
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company
pounds benefits
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improving in post and salary. on other hand many individuals think is
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no chance to upgrade any new skill they're changing
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and
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organisation have many advantages if they change
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they get a different atmosphere working new skill new
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you more salary and
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post on your skill and
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you make new contacts and they
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help you in many ways. In, conclusion
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with the same organisation is not good they stop your growth
in my opinion
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with
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company
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is good for
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the life
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they help you to improve and
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yourself people learn something new in their profession.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stability
  • loyalty
  • familiarity
  • upward movement
  • sense of community
  • job security
  • diverse experiences
  • flexibility
  • acquisition
  • broad range
  • exposure
  • industries
  • practices
  • cultures
  • fostering
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • professional network
  • compelling case
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