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Some people believe the purpose of education should be helping the individual to become useful for society, while others believe it should help individuals to achieve their ambitions. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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One of the main reasons why
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education
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 of
people
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 plays a very important role in society is that it will give them an opportunity to help other
people
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.
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, educating
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 who want to be teachers is very useful as, once they graduate, they will teach other students and help them to have more knowledge. It will result in more
people
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 receiving
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 and
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 very important. Doctors are another example. Their
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 is considered
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very useful because they will be able to cure ill
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 and save many lives. If society does not invest in educating those professionals it can have a huge negative impact on the well-being of its
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, I agree with those who believe that
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 of individuals should cater more to their personal ambitions. Many of us have different preferences and I think
people
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 can achieve more if they do what they like.
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, if they study what they want, they will have more passion to learn it and master the subject they study.
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 make them more dedicated to the job they will do in the future and enrich their communities with the best professionals.
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, if students learn a subject they do not like, they will not be motivated to finish it and it will be
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 of their time and money if they do not complete their studies. In conclusion,
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 studying subjects which are useful for the society has its benefits, personally I think that individuals should be given the freedom to choose their profession, as their love for the chosen profession will give them an opportunity to master their skills and become the most skilful professionals
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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