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Some people think that the range of technology currently available is increasing the gap between rich people and poor people. Others think that it is causing the opposite effect. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In
this
 present era,
technology
 has been playing a significant role in the world. Some humans believe that the range of
technology
 available to people is booming the gap between poor and rich,
however
, other people think that it has a negative effect. I will discuss both views and give my opinion at the end. To embark, there are a plethora of technological devices that have been affecting human life.
Firstly
, there is a wide range of commutes and other electric gadgets have used in a different sector: education, healthcare and job sector. Nowadays, it has not contacted without internet, so, large machines are not available that type of factor.
For example
, a survey was conducted by the TATA group of the company, a large number of machines and other electric equipment have not
used
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 without the internet but sometimes they have done their work without the help of individual groups.
On the other hand
, there are many positive effects
technology
 through.
Therefore
, some poor people can not purchase a high range of
technology
 because they have not learned a high level of education. In the present day,
technology
 has been increasing day by day as well as the high cost of
technology
 introduce in different sectors.
For instance
, a survey was conducted in Japan,
this
 country introduces a high level of
technology
 at a high rate so, all countries can not
ititafford
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Stafford
. On a concluding note, there are many merits and demerits of
technology
. In my opinion, technological innovations will be available for their money worries.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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