Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favour of them because of their benefits to humanity. Can animal experiments be justifid? Are there any alternatives?

There is a controversial debate on animal
experiments
.
While
it cannot be deniable that essential scientific discoveries are attained by
experiments
on animals,
this
phenomenon should be banned because of its inhumanity.
This
essay is devoted to
justifing
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justifying
the view and proposing solutions for
this
problem. It is true that animal
tests
has
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formed a foundation for a wide range of achievements in medical and
costmetic
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cosmetic
fields.
Animal
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like dogs, rabbits, and rats are exploited to test
on
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new drugs or products, which helps
human
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to
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develop new applications serving the desire
of
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health and
beauty
at
a
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cruel expense of
animal's
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death.
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, vaccination testing has caused the death of
thousands
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lab rats, in turns
safe
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the lives of
millions
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people. To
human
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humans
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,
this
trade-off is reasonable for the sake of survival.
However
, there are
experiments
that
taken
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place on
animal
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animals
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which are not related to saving lives, but only for cosmetic purposes, which has raised concerns about morality. Rabbits are tested with
beauty
product
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, which leads to miserable deaths.
This
cannot be normalized, as
modern
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world
are
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aiming to achieve a harmonious living with nature. In my opinion,
certains
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certain
tests
on
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the animal
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animal
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, which
does
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not serve
human's
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survival
purpose
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, should be put out of
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. To address
this
lingering problem, alternatives are feasible with the development of technology.
Human's
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body has been put into throughout investigations dating back
thousands
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years ago, giving us profound knowledge to
immitate certains
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imitate certain
parts of the body with similar functions and reactions to external stimulations.
Thus
, a solution can be developed based on
this
concept,
scientist
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can build
human-like
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system to be tested with new medicine or
beauty
products.
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, artificial human skin can be made to predict
the
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dermatology reactions with
newly-developed
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cosmetics. Another solution, especially for
beauty
industries, is to use current insights on
naturual
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natural
compounds, which
has
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been
proved
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unharmed to human skin, as a foundation to develop
tests
without involving animal
experiments
. In conclusion, there are
certains
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certain
animal
tests
that should be restricted totally because of their cruelty, as artificial human
body
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can be an alternative solution. To accelerate the transformation to
more
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the more
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humane testing method, large funding
are
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needed by both
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gornverment
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government
and private sectors.
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