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Some people believe that there should be the death penalty for extremely serious crimes. Others believe that it is not morally correct to kill criminals Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Criminal activity in the world has significantly increased in recent years. Some of these crimes are extremely cruel and heinous
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, some people are of the opinion that these criminals should face the
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 penalty. Others believe that capital punishment is ethically incorrect regardless of the crime committed. In
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 essay, I will explain both points of view and will
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 state my personal opinion. Some people believe that the only appropriate trial for heinous acts is a sentence of
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. One of the reasons for
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 belief is that these criminals should be exterminated from society for their terrible deeds as it is the only way to serve justice to their victims.
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, the possibility of punishment of
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 calibre will spread fear amongst citizens who wish to commit
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 deeds, resulting in a decrease in
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 felonies.
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, others oppose the idea of capital punishment as every living being has the right to live irrespective of their actions and humanity does not have the right to take anybody's life. By killing someone in the name of justice , humanity itself turns systemically violent . Sentencing a murderer on
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, is the same as committing a murder for the act of murder. It is
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 argued that capital punishments do not actually solve the underlying problems which are leading to the increase in crime, whereas more focus should be given to rehabilitating
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 offenders and improving social services. In conclusion, I feel both the arguments have their own merits but, we do not live in a perfect world where rehabilitation of
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 felons can be done in a positive manner and for offences like murder and rape , the
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 penalty should be continued.
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