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Band 8

You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: •Explain why you want to take time off work •Give details of the amount of time you need •Suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

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Dear Mcdonaman, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
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 letter to request some time off because my
dog
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 has a serious health issue that needs attention.
Last
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 week, when we went for a walk, my
dog
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 was attacked by another
dog
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, which caused serious injuries to his face. He has lost his confidence around people and other animals, and he is not able to go for a walk without me.
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, he must go to the vet twice a day
due to
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 treatment requirements, which will continue for one week. Given that I have to take care of my
dog
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, I will need to spend all day with him. Considering my situation, I kindly request one week off to help me take care of my
dog
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. During my absence, I would be able to work from home and join online meetings. Alternatively, my colleague, Andrey, will assist me in completing the project after hours. Thank you for your time and consideration. I am looking forward to your response. Best regards, Ibrahim

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Score: 7. Give the exact days or dates for the week off. For example: “from 4 to 10 May.” This makes your request more clear.
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Your work plan is not fully clear. You say you need to spend all day with your dog, but then say you can work from home. Choose one clear plan.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 7. Use one link to make the work plan flow better, such as “To make sure the project stays on track...”
coherence and cohesion
“Alternatively” does not fit well here. Say whether you will work from home or whether Andrey will cover your work.
coherence and cohesion
Use your manager’s full name or title if you know it. For example: “Dear Mr Mcdonaman,”
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You answer all three parts: why you need leave, how long you need, and how the work can be done.
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The reason is clear and gives enough detail.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order: reason, time needed, work plan, and closing.
coherence and cohesion
Each main paragraph has one clear job, so the letter is easy to follow.
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