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Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people.what the possible causes of this trend, and what solutions would be effective in reducing crime.

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Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. The
quality
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 of life is considered the main reason why
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 is the case,and
governments
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 should be responsible for solving
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 problem. The biggest factor leading to
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 problem is that bad management all types in the
country
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 since the bad economy, not professional in organizing transports
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 it will lead to
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 bad
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 of life, particularly in families that parents do not have enough
money
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 to take care their kid.
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, according to the latest research conducted by Bangkok University, it was revealed that 80% of families in Brazil are living in the slum and their parents don't have
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 to take kids to study in a school.
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, Children must find
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 by themselves;
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, most jobs in the
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 do not permit children under 18 years old to get a job.
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, they have to find
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 by
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crimping
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quality
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 of life plays a major role in more
criming
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crimping
. In order to solve
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 issue,
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 should take action as soon as possible. The most significant solution to
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 is the fact that
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 must maintain all kinds of public service because good organizing will lead to
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 good
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 in their citizens. To illustrate, in recent news, it has been reported that In japan that it was the developed
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. most public services were good and most of the
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 of populations in
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country
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 were good either. By doing
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,
criming
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crime
crimping
 in
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country
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 will less than other countries in the world. In conclusion,Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people because badly management all types in the
country
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.In order to combat
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,
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 must maintain all kinds of public services.

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