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Online classes make conventional classrooms unnecessary. To What extent do you agree/disagree?

#classes #classrooms
Over the
last
 two or three decades, technology has been flourishing by leaps and bounds in every
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, especially in
education
.
As a result
, virtual learning has been rising
tremendosly
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tremendously
 at present,
therefore
, some think that
traditional
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classroom
 teaching
method
 is unnecessary due to online
education
. I strongly disagree with
this
 statement and
this
 essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons. To commence with,
traditional
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method
 of
education
 always gives enormous benefits to students. They can ask any doubts to their tutors in the
classroom
 and they can study with
the
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fellow pupils,
therefore
, sharing ideas and
clarififying
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clarifying
 doubts.
For example
, India has
innumerable
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 conventional
method
 of
learning
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 system,
hence
, all kinds of pupils can be learnt easily and can get a fair job with a handsome amount of salary. A plethora of successful persons
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 studied in the old
method
 of teaching, they have a good life,
hence
classroom
method
 is necessary for students and
online
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 system never dominates
this
.
Furthermore
,
online
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 learning
method
 provides plenty
negatives
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 to students because
this
 kind of learning system requires a
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smartphone
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smart phone
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smartphone
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 or laptop and strong internet connection, but
still
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 now a multitude of mankind cannot
affort
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afford
 these kinds of amenities across the world,
such
 as under developing nations.
For instance
, Sri Lanka's humankind has faced
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problem
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,
therefore
, they cannot
affort
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afford
 in these high standard facilities. Traditional kind of teaching
method
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methods
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 can provide
the
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education
 without needs any special facilities,
therefore
, many nations adhere the
classroom
 learning. To conclude,
online
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 training
method
 gives tremendous benefits, even though,
traditional
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method
 can provide the best
education
 as well as
needws
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needs
news
 any special requirements,
therefore
, I
stronlgy
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strongly
 disagree with
this
 statement in the above-mentioned details. I hope
this
 process is conducive to building a healthy society.
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