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Some people are making new friends by using socializing network website and Internet chat rooms. Some people say that this is a good thing. Other people say that people should make new friends by face-to-face chat. Discuss these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, it is hard to imagine reality without social
media
. A great number of humans assume creating a new
friendship
 through chat rooms and social websites is very convenient whereas others oppose that individuals should hobnob by eye-to-eye meeting. From my perspective, people make new
friends
 if they know each other. In
this
 essay, I will support my answer with relevant examples.
Initially
, using social networks for setting up a new
friendship
 is an extremely bad idea because of addiction. Those who practice social
media
 a lot start to feel addicted to Facebook or Instagram. The New York Times published an article about dopamine addiction
of
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 social
media
 and how it changes human’s life and attitude. To illustrate with an example, my colleague spent much time chatting and finding
a
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new
friends
, and she realized that she became addicted. After which she quit all of her social
media
 and started to make real
friends
, not virtual ones.
Secondly
, a face-to-face meeting is more guaranteed for long-term relationships. You have time and opportunity to get acquainted with the people who surround you and know their characteristics features. In
this
 case, a new
friendship
 will have a quality and will
last
 long as you know the person whom you deal with.
For example
, I and my schoolmate are
friends
 since school, we have a lot
of
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in common to discuss and to do, we support each other.
This
 is possible only when you have one-on-one cases. To conclude,
although
 social
media
 has brought some benefits to society, the drawbacks of overusing them is much more crucial. I strongly believe, people should make a real friend with a long-lasting
friendship
 which will have more quality than making
friends
 through network websites.
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