Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.

In my honest opinion,

music

is always a good way to get to know each other and bring the different cultures and age groups together. According to my own experience, it was

such

a fun program when at university we came around together with the international students and showed our

music

from different

atrists

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artists

from our own countries.

Beside

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that, it was

also

an entertaining experience when my family and its friends, parents and children came together and had a

christmas

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party. We played famous tracks from all decades, and children showed the top today’s hits,

also

the parents from their young age.

However

, taste in

music

can always be personal and diverse, people who are open to each other, like to

listen

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the favourite songs of

others

, because they can make a small conclusion of one’s personality across

these kind

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this kind

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of activities.

Furthermore

, mankind can get acquainted with different cultures and the history of a country by listening to its national anthem

for example

. On one hand, it is a good „get-to-know” each other activity,

also

can bring the different age groups together to have some fun.

On the other hand

, there will be always people who are not respectful enough to give some space to

others

and always try to steal the show by not letting

others

prevail.

Nevertheless

, one can easily get hurt, if the

others

do not like the

music

that he loves or

make

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fun of it. In

clonclusion

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conclusion

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agree with the statement, but the community has to be respectful, open-

minden

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minded

and patient with each other

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if they want

this

activity to be enjoyed by everyone in the group.

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