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People no longer use newspapers and television because the internet plays the same role. It is positive or negative development?

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Nowadays,technology is increasing by leaps and bounds with a lot of amenities,
therefore
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 many individuals tend to scroll down
news
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 on the internet websites
instead
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 of using
news
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 channels and journals.In my opinion,it is beneficial for
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society in many ways. To embark on,these days,people do not have enough
time
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 to go outside and purchase newspapers because of their busy schedules,so they utilize the
news
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 websites like
way2news
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the way2news
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 app by sitting at home through the mobile phone.it
is
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also ensures
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also
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 ensures enormous information about the world
news
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,but sometimes
news
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 has given by
the
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social media is not transparent,but the main advantage is that if we miss the
news
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 on the television,
then
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 we can operate the mobile to know the statistics,
thus
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 electronic gadgets are an indispensable thing in everyone's life.
for instance
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,if we do not have
a
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power at a home to watch the
news
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 channel,
then
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 we do not have to worry about the power.because technology gives us
a
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plenty of amenities.at that
time
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 we should use that facilitates,
moreover
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internet
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the internet
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 saves our valuable
time
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 by going outside. On another hand,there are
also
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 benefits of using journals as well as channels.
firstly
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,by reading the newspaper we can improve
the
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 reading and writing skills.
furthermore
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,not only enhance the skills but
also
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 it is
a
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portable,so we can carry easily without feel burdening.
secondly
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,it
is
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also provides
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also
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 provides entertainment like having a cup of
coffe
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coffee
 with reading the article is an excellent way to spend
time
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.
additionally
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,watching TV together brings more enthusiasm
in
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 a
familiy
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family
.because we can watch the tv at a
time
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.
finally
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,it is
a
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cost-effective compared to the internet.
for example
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,during our grandparents
time
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,there
was
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were
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 no technology facilities,so they used to read
news
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 on
the
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print paper and television. To conclude,both are imperative
on
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 their own way.many individuals have diverse mindsets which vary from person to person,so they should decide whether
print
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 paper is the best or online article is imperative.
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