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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Child
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 is the most essential for developing the future nation,
therefore
,
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education
 is the crucial aspect of their lives.
However
, some believe that
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 teaching
method
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school
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both viewpoints, I strongly agree with the latter opinion for the following reasons. On the one hand,
school
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 provides enormous amounts of wisdom as well as good quality,
therefore
,
school
-based learning is the most crucial for children while they can socialise
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 other students and make friends. To be more elaborate,
this
 kind of
school
 learning system not only teaches knowledge for infants but
also
 teaches good
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morals
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,
hence
,
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 would be
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good
human
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humans
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 in society, these all good qualities can only provide
school
 rather than anything.
For example
, India has only the
school
-based learning system because
this
 kind of teaching
method
 gives more benefits to
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 as well society,
Therefore
,
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 learning
method
 is the most crucial for infants lives.
On the other hand
, home-based learning practice can enhance
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a
child
's improvement tremendously because parents take care
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 their little ones in
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every situation,
therefore
, a
child
 can learn freely with their family members. To be more elaborate, parents can teach
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basic education as well as extracurricular activities for their little ones,
as a result
, they have a chance to learn all skills in their childhood period.
For instance
, in New Zealand, offspring's starting
school
 age is above seven because they encourage
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 learning system until six a
child
 can study to their family members.
Therefore
,
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 learning
method
 provides enormous amounts of improvements to offspring. To conclude, offspring's education is
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vital for
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every nation.
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 learning process provides wisdom and good morale tremendously;
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the home-based
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 process can give a chance to
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 extracurricular activities who offspring. In my opinion, about
this
,
school
 is the best place for learning
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 offspring and I hope
this
 process is conducive to building a literate society.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • homeschooling
  • traditional schooling
  • development
  • individualized education
  • flexibility
  • scheduling
  • one-on-one attention
  • learning style
  • pace
  • safe and controlled learning environment
  • practical learning
  • negative influences
  • socialization
  • teamwork skills
  • diverse perspectives
  • independence
  • time management
  • qualified teachers
  • specialized resources
  • extracurricular activities
  • sense of community
  • hybrid approach
  • personality
  • striking a balance
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