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In some countries is a difference in age between parents and children nowadays is greater than in the past is this a positive or negative development

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It is becoming more and more common to have a wider age gap between
parents
 and
children
;
however
, while some say that it brings benefits ,others believe that
this
 has more drawbacks.In my opinion, it gives primarily more positive effects on both
parents
 and
children
.
Firstly
, as
people
 get older they become more mature and experienced in many cases ,meanings that
such
people
 are more likely to become good
parents
 and keep family in balance, rather than a younger one.
For instance
 ,when young
parents
 have a baby they usually do not know even basic rules to deal with some problems related to their infants, as a ,result the newborn’s grandparents come to help.
However
 ,
people
 on their averages are often planning and preparing themselves before having
children
.
Moreover
 ,to bring up a child
parents
 need to be at least financial stable ,because they need to create not only a comfortable atmosphere for a baby to live but
also
 have some funds for their future education ,
for example
 . ,
Unfortunately
Add a comma
,Unfortunately
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 young
parents
 cannot fulfil these criteria , since at
such
 age
people
 usually obtain for education and cannot earn enough to support a family. But
on the other hand
 , with a wider age gap, it can be harder to communicate with
parents
 ,misunderstandings and different worldviews that may burn fights between
parents
 and their
children
 ;
however
 ,
this
 cannot be a major problem and might be easily solved by having agreements. In conclusion , the modern world gives its own standards for living and planning ,so childbirth is becoming a distant desire for many couples with the reasons of not being prepared for supporting and upbringing them. I strongly believe that
this
 is the right choice and some negative consequences cannot be a big problem.
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