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People today can use the internet to learn about lives and cultures in other countries, so it is not necessary to travel anymore. Do you agree?

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The Internet is the greatest invention of the 20th century. It is often argued that just by browsing through it , one can gain an understanding of other
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 customs and traditions. I completely disagree with
this
 opinion and think that human interaction is important in knowing people and
its surrounding
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. First of all, travelling creates meaningful relationships. There's nothing better than the feeling of excitement of going to a new place, meeting the locals, and personally witnessing the way of life of the people around it. Things that couldn't be felt by just browsing online.
For instance
, watching Chinese families make dumplings in preparation for
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 New Year online isn't comparable with the experience of a traveller who is in China and making it with the local Chinese family.
Second,
exploration of a new place gives more personal knowledge and understanding.
Hence
, it makes long-lasting memories.
In addition
, it
also
 helps shape someone's personality and perspective in life.
Moreover
, not all information online is factual,
therefore
, it gives people wrong ideas.
For example
,
due to
 the international media portrayal of China, many foreigners think that it is a secluded and outdated society when in fact, it's the entire opposite. For the past 13 years of
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 being in the country, I would testify how it had advanced technologically and slowly opened to the world over the years. In conclusion, I strongly believe that learning firsthand through travelling is necessary for knowing other
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 lives and cultures because it's more worthwhile and meaningful.
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