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Computers and modems have made it possible for office workers to do much of their work from home instead of working in offices every day. Working from home should be encouraged as it is good for workers and employers. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, technology help employee to
work
 at
home
instead
 of going to the
office
. Working at
home
 can be beneficial for workers and employers.
This
 essay will discuss why remote
work
 can be beneficial for labourers and why should be encouraged.  After covid,
people
 realise that
work
 at
home
 has a lot of advantages;
for example
, some companies give money to their employers to build their own
office
 at
home
, the funds can be used to buy a new desk, chair, computer and internet bill.
In addition
, workers choose to live in other cities where the cost of living is cheaper, therewith most
office
 is located in the expensive neighbourhood. Working from
home
people
 will not need transportation. Some individuals leave far from the
office
, these
people
 can take one to two hours to get in your job. Remote
work
 can give the opportunity to use
this
time
 for personal hobbies, which can improve their productivity because their workers are having enough
time
 to rest and
time
 for pastime. On other hand, that can seriously impact the economy,
people
 will be working at
home
, so those
people
 will decide to move to other places, because leaving close to the
office
 can be expensive,
consequently
 making houses and offices empty in big cities.
This
 essay discussed that a remote job is helpful to save money because
people
 do not need to leave close to the
office
 and
also
 give more free
time
,
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 because these individuals will not need transportation. In my point of view,
people
 should be encouraged to
work
 at
home
, because
people
 can
work
 and travel at the same
time
 and have more
time
 for recreation.
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