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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from home is recycled.they say that only way to increase recycling is for government to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

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Some are of the view that insufficient recycled of domestic
waste
 and express that the only approach to
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the number
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recycling rate is for authority to make it
legal
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 requirement.to a large extent I agree with
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 suggested viewpoint.my preference is justified
further
. The fundamental argument is that
people
 can aware with
law
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the law
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 to recycle of their household
waste
.
goverment
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government
 should make
strict
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 rule to overcome the
waste
 material.they
also
 do
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 for
people
 watch and understand the importance of recycling.more and more citizens become using a variety of products and after been used they throw into dustbin
although
 it could
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 in different kinds of things which
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 from
waste
.
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 add to the mentioned point without any act against
waste
recycle
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people
 started throwing
waste
 anywhere and
this
make
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 various health problems.
moreover
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 state should put different dustbins on the city streets that encourage society to throw
waste
 into them.
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contrary
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 it should not be disregarded that there
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 no need to make rules on recycling of
waste
 because
of
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nowadays
people
 are aware
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this
 and definitely know the crucial of recycling even the school
also
 teaches pupils about recycling of domestic
waste
. To conclude it can be eventually commented that
act
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 are essential to make person recycle their daily
waste
.
i
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 believe that government should make
separate
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a separate
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 department to handle all
this
 recycling situation and to ensure citizens about laws.
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