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Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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It has been noticed that some people contribute most of their lives to stay close at their born
place
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.there could be multiple
reason
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reasons
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 for
this
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;
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however
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,however
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 living
at
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in
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 their birth area has
it's
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its
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 own benefits as well as drawbacks. both the question would be answered
further
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. Examining the causes the foremost one is they are attached
with
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to
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 that specific
place
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.every person around the world love to spend time at their native
place
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 because
of
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apply
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they feel relaxed and can enjoy quality time with family as well as friends.
tge
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the
next
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 reason is that people find
better
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a better
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 environment
at
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apply
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there rather than
city
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the city
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 . In today's life in metros has become more
conplecated
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complicated
 and affect to their health so they prefer to living in
countryside
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the countryside
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 where they are grown up.
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moreover
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,moreover
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 they can live with relatives and meet
everyday
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every day
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. Discussing the reward and detriment of living at
hometow
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hometown
 for whole lives.the biggest reward is that they find senior citizens who are
well known
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well-known
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 elders
have
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who have
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lot
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a lot
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 of experience and they guide and show the correct path on
critical
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the critical
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issue
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issues
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 at the time of decision making.
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Also
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 it has demerits to living there.people have no employment nearly rural area so that it would affect the
youngsters
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youngster's
youngsters'
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 upcoming life to find
better
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a better
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 job relating to their source of study
instead
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 of
this
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 communication services or
accomodation
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accommodation
 facilities are very poor they can't see any future of the life. To sum up and offer my position it's quite beneficial for individuals to
living
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live
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 and native
place
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 and connected with family members;
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however
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 that could be
serious
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a serious
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 impact on their career.
i
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I
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 believe that
instead
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 of living only
at
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in
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hometown
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the hometown
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 person should live outside and learn something new from
world
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the world
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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