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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is no denying the fact that the main purpose of sharing
information
 is arguable. The question is which the best shares all
information
 or there is some data that do not allow to shear with others because
this
 kind too important or too valuable. While it is held belief, sharing
information
 as possible is good especially regarding scientific research
,
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 and the academic
world
. that can make the
world
 avoid many problems that may happen when hiding
information
.
For example
, what happened during COVID-19, the disaster could have been avoided if China had detected the disease early, where the
people
 who are visited China have responsible to transfer COVID-19 to their
country
 when they back. On another hand, there are
people
 who have different opinions, they believe there is
information
 that cannot share with others, they build their opinion on maybe it damages the
country
’s reputation so can
also
 damage the economy which leads to more problems in the
country
. Especially those
country
 depend on tourism, during COVID-19 they always trying to export the CORONA under control, to make more communities come to their
country
 , the rise the economic indicator
such
 as Egypt. In conclusion, both teams have some part of the right, the
country
 interest is important and every government work on the best for their
people
. but cannot be the case of big damage for the
world
 because they only think in the
country
 with careless the other billion
people
 in the
world
. So each
country
 should be evaluated if shearing
this
 info can save the community on not.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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