the best way to cut down crime rate is by building more prisons and giving longer sentences. do you agree or disagree?

In
this
modern era, crime has
became
Change the verb form
become
show examples
a major issue in every part of
Add an article
the word
a word
show examples
word
Correct your spelling
world
show examples
and it is believed by many that the most effective way to decrease
number
Change the article
the number
show examples
of offences is by building more prisons and giving stronger punishments to offenders.
However
, I disagree with
this
statement and the reasons to support my belief will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, prisons are necessary as they definitely help in controlling crimes. Many
small time
Add a hyphen
small-time
show examples
criminals if given stronger punishments will reluctant to commit
crime
Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
show examples
next
time and some repeat offenders if kept behind bars for a long time will not be able to commit any heinous.
For example
,
usually
Add a comma
,usually
show examples
rapists and serial killers are given life imprisonment so it is best that they stay away from society.
Nevertheless
, finding the root cause of
this
chronic disease will be more effective in getting rid of the problem permanently. Often, most of the offences registered are due to adverse situations or frustrations which are induced because of inequality and stress. So, meeting up with the daily necessities of people, building more rehabilitation centres and educational premises will certainly decrease the pressure on
general
Add an article
the general
show examples
public.
For instance
, many developed countries like Canada, are
providing
Wrong verb form
provide
show examples
free basic education and medical facilities, have different tax slabs
according
Add the preposition
toaccording
show examples
financial status which certainly gives a sense of freedom and stability.
This
helped people
relieving
Wrong verb form
relieve
show examples
their stress and resulted in
decrease
Add an article
a decrease
the decrease
show examples
of
Change preposition
in
show examples
offences in the country. To summarise, cutting down
crime
Correct article usage
the crime
show examples
rate is one of
Add an article
the upmost
show examples
upmost
Correct your spelling
utmost
show examples
priority issues that need to
addressed
Add a missing verb
be addressed
show examples
and there are many ways to do so.
Therefore
, it can be inferred that though, prisons are necessary to keep criminals behind bars so that they can reflect on their demeanour but it is not the only way as discussed above.
Submitted by gupta.manish867 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: