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Children's Education is expensive. In some countries, the government pays some or all the costs. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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In recent times, due to inflation, the cost of everything is touching the roof. Many countries offer free
education
 or charge minimal tuition to their
citizens
 so that country can achieve a high literacy rate and can improve overall employment numbers.
This
 essay will discuss why the advantages outweigh the disadvantages in more detail. One of the major advantages of a
government funded
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education
system
 is that all
citizens
 will be treated in an equal way. Since everyone will have equal rights, poor
people
 will get an opportunity to compete in school with rich
people
.
For example
, the government in Canada provide free
education
 in all the provinces with an aim to achieve the highest literacy rate in the world. Another positive outlook of the free
education
system
 is to prepare
people
 so that they can meet the minimum requirement for employment.
This
 will help
people
 to get employed and learn for their living.
On the other hand
, the major disadvantage of a
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public-funded
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public
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 funded
education
system
 is the budget. Government has to allocate more funds to their
education
system
 to make it free for everyone.
This
 means that they have to compromise the budget of different sectors like defence or import/export causing which impacts their GDP growth directly. Due to results in inflation and a
further
 increase in prices of commodities for
citizens
. Another important drawback is the quality of
education
 compared to private institutions. It has been proven that the quality of professors in public universities is compromised due to the less pay salary structure of universities. To conclude, I think advantages outweigh disadvantages because it is important for
citizens
 to receive some
education
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socio-economic disparities
  • government funding
  • educational institutions
  • enhanced quality of education
  • educated workforce
  • boosting the economy
  • dependency
  • bureaucracy
  • innovation
  • flexibility
  • parental involvement
  • financially responsible
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