Some countries are introducing an additional tax on drinks containing high levels of sugar due to the negative effects of consuming large amounts of sugar on people’s health. Should governments impose extra taxes to discourage people from consuming sugary drinks and prevent negative effects on people’s health or should it be people’s own responsibility?
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It is argued that
goverment
policy to get tax from sweet Correct your spelling
government
drinks
because it is unhealty
for the Correct your spelling
unhealthy
people
. Although
i
disagree that drinking habits Change the capitalization
I
is
not only Change the verb form
are
people
own responsibility, I do not think
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tothink
get
more money from them is the best way Wrong verb form
getting
goverment
could change their habit.
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government
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number of Add an article
An increasing
The increasing
tax
for sugary Fix the agreement mistake
taxes
drinks
is very problematic, in one side it could be increase
the Change the verb form
increase
price
and make people
difficult to buy it, but on the other side people
who get addicted still tend to buy it and it will not stop them. For some people
, the rise of tax make
them very hard to get Change the verb form
makes
the
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drinks
, because they do not have money enough to buy it. On the other hand
, people
who love the drink very much and have more money will not stop because of the price
and still buy it while it
still reasonable. Add a verb
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wasit
For example
, many people
in Indonesia still buy the
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apply
price
is doubled increase . Thus
, for some people
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,people
price
is not a problem, and could not stop them.
There are
some solution to make Change the verb form
is
people
stop to consume
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consuming
the
sugary Correct article usage
apply
drinks
, two of them is education
from the school and publicity in
social Change preposition
on
media
. Some research show what people
do when they are in school could affect their adult life
, so education
about which one is healty
or unhealthy must be introduced Correct your spelling
healthy
since
younger age. Social Change preposition
at
media
is the big things
in the current trends, Fix the agreement mistake
thing
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
people
who see and follow the advertisement in social media
show promised things, so publication using social media
is a
effective way to decrease Change the article
an
people
from sugary drinks
.For example
, healthy life
like running and cycling during di pandemic have been very hype in
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on
the
social Correct article usage
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media
and can make people
follow it in the real life
. So, the proper education
and publication in the
social Correct article usage
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media
could lead the
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people
leave
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to leave
the
sweet Correct article usage
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drinks
and start the
healthy Correct article usage
a
life
.
In conclusion, to stop people
from getting obese because of the drinks
, Correct your spelling
government
goverment
have to do more than increase the Correct article usage
the goverment
price
because the problem is not about the price
it is about their habit, moreover
give them more Add a comma
,moreover
education
to be healthy using education
and some advertisements could make them change their habbit
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habit
habits
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