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Some people say that a special tax should be put on food and drinks with high levels of added sugar. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Several steps are taken by the governments of different countries in the world to improve the health of their citizens. There are some
people
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 who believe that
food
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products
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 containing
a high amounts
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high amounts
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 of
sugar
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 should be taxed heavily to reduce their
consumption
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 while there are
also
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 those and so am I who do not support
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 idea. Both sides of
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 argument with appropriate reasons will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. The
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 reason, I believe, the
people
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 supporting the idea of taxing sweet
food
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products
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 have would be that
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 foods cause harm to
people
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's health. Many diseases are caused when
sugar
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 is consumed in excessive amounts and there are several
products
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 in the market that have a lot of added
sugar
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 to enhance their taste. A spike of about 20%,
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, was observed in the number of
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 suffering from diabetes
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 year.
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, it is a belief of some
people
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 that
consumption
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 of
such
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food
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products
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 could be reduced among
people
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 if they are taxed heavily, as taxing them would increase their price
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 would reduce their demand to some extent.
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 on the basis of the discussion above it seems quite right to tax foods having
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high levels of
sugar
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, I think that
this
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 measure would not be helpful in solving the problem discussed above. What I mean to say is, it would not help in reducing the
consumption
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 of
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food
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products
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 that much. Those who like eating sugary
food
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products
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 would consume them anyway, there would be a little reduction but not that great decrease observed in the overall
consumption
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 of these
products
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. In conclusion, charging
food
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products
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 having
the
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high levels of
sugar
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 would reduce their
consumption
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 to some extent and would be helpful in preventing
people
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 from suffering from several diseases caused due to
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products
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, but
this
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 measure would not help in seeing greater results.

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