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Some people say that a special tax should be put on food and drinks with high levels of added sugar. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Several steps are taken by the governments of different countries in the world to improve the health of their citizens. There are some
people
 who believe that
food
products
 containing
a high amounts
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 of
sugar
 should be taxed heavily to reduce their
consumption
 while there are
also
 those and so am I who do not support
this
 idea. Both sides of
this
 argument with appropriate reasons will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. The
first
 reason, I believe, the
people
 supporting the idea of taxing sweet
food
products
 have would be that
such
 foods cause harm to
people
's health. Many diseases are caused when
sugar
 is consumed in excessive amounts and there are several
products
 in the market that have a lot of added
sugar
 to enhance their taste. A spike of about 20%,
for instance
, was observed in the number of
people
 suffering from diabetes
last
 year.
Therefore
, it is a belief of some
people
 that
consumption
 of
such
food
products
 could be reduced among
people
 if they are taxed heavily, as taxing them would increase their price
hence
 would reduce their demand to some extent.
Although
 on the basis of the discussion above it seems quite right to tax foods having
the
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high levels of
sugar
, I think that
this
 measure would not be helpful in solving the problem discussed above. What I mean to say is, it would not help in reducing the
consumption
 of
such
food
products
 that much. Those who like eating sugary
food
products
 would consume them anyway, there would be a little reduction but not that great decrease observed in the overall
consumption
 of these
products
. In conclusion, charging
food
products
 having
the
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high levels of
sugar
 would reduce their
consumption
 to some extent and would be helpful in preventing
people
 from suffering from several diseases caused due to
such
products
, but
this
 measure would not help in seeing greater results.
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