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Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, many people can access various courses online because some colleges give opportunities
the
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for Internet-based
education
 to
students
. While there are drawbacks of long-distance
education
, I believe the benefits outweigh the drawbacks. On the one hand, there is the main drawback of online
education
 is indirect communication.
Students
 do not have face-to-face interaction with professors and peers. There is only a written form of communication and without instant feedback from the teacher. Unlike traditional
education
, online
education
 does not allow
students
 to exchange ideas, discussions and peer support.
Therefore
, they are less motivated and
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 on studying.
For instance
, traditional classrooms give
students
 a sense of unity and they can collaborate on projects.
On the other hand
, in spite of the above discussion, I think there are more benefits the Internet-based
education
.
First
 of all, online
education
 allows a flexible lesson schedule
that is
 suitable for
students
 working in a full-time job.
Furthermore
, mature
students
 do not have to learn alongside immature ones, without any interruption.
Students
 can speed up lessons to finish sooner by online
education
, as well.
Finally
, it offers anybody who is willing to study, regardless of age, location, background.
For example
, my uncle ,who is 65 years old, enrolled on a course in an overseas university, before these times, he could not even imagine it because of the expenses of universities and the long distance from his hometown. In conclusion,
although
 there are negative sides to online
education
, it became more convenient for many people because of the eases. I believe, it will be more common in the future.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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