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An increasing trend nowadays is for young adults to olay computer games. Some people say this is a negative development. Discuss and give your opinion.

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Many societies claim that at a time when modern technology is advancing , the interest of the young families in it has
also
 increased significantly. Of ,course there are a number of downsides to
this
 problem. I think it is true and I advocate strongly with the opinion of the majority and am going to reflect my own view of
such
 a common üssü. Fırst and foremost the reason why I approve is that playing
computer
games
 long term , young adults ʼs health ,not only young adults but
also
 all populations.
For instance
 , taking my brother. Twelve hours and so every day he plays
computer
games
.Obviously, his health is observed serious problem
that is
 to say his eyes become dim. Alternatively, video
games
 set aside real-soul younker.
Likewise
 , they do not solve their own problems and are part of society heart. Though it is true that along with
computer
games
, other technologies are
also
 developing rapidly.
In particular
, activity today is unimaginable without modern technology. Obviously,
this
 determines the quality of life.
Hence
, these conveniences made human hearts much easier .
For example
, social networks enable to know new information and making far away. Even so another point worth noting is by social networks more people should interfere in many bad groups.
This
 is certainly one of the negative effects of social media .
As a result
, many communities can join gangs and harm not only themselves but
also
 others . To sum up,
although
computer
games
 and other similar technologies have a number of advantages, they do not outweigh the disadvantages.
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