Stress is now a major problem in many countries around the world. What are some of the factors in modern society that cause this stress, and how can we reduce it?

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stress

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outbreaks and methods of

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lowering. The vast majority of us are

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to rural ones.

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brings different challenges which could be considered as a prime cause of

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world it is vital to

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of vehicles, work rush and limited time for a rest with a permanent search of ways to earn

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all factors that contribute to our state of depression.

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, modern human tends to postpone

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because of being involved in those factors which were mentioned above. We consider money and our

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pack of negative emotions. The

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serum is quite complex.

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, it is fundamental to keep yourself in

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. Secondary - hardworking should be replaced by simple prolific

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with intervals for relaxation. And the

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but not least is trying not to take all responsibilities on your

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. To sum up, unfortunately, I can't help admitting the fact that

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problem which leads to lots of

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, but it doesn't suppose that it is

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to cure. More and more methods against depression and

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being found these days that works in practice. All we need is treating to ourselves carefully

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financial instability
social safety nets
constant connectivity
work-life balance
remote work
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Stress is now a major problem in many countries around the world. What are some of the factors in modern society that cause this stress, and how can we reduce it?

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Some people think that too much money has been spent looking after and repairing old buildings, so we should knock down old buildings and build modern ones instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsabilities. discuss both views and give your own opinion

Many people argue that restaurants should be required to disclose the nutritional information of the dishes they serve. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?