Many doctors recommend that older people exercise regularly, but most patients do not follow an exercise routine. Why do you think this happens? How can people be encouraged to exercise regularly?

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recomendations
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recommendations
for elderly persons propose
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physical activity, but only a few
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follow these guides. I think, that with ageing there is
also
appear some difficulties in developing motivation for coming out from own comfort zone. So, let’s try to find out encouraging ways for increasing
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of active participants.
Firstly
, to do recommended exercises it’s required to win against all internal laziness and muscles inertion externally. But as it’s well known, once the
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path of muscles training is done
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to repeat success.
Also
, sometimes older people just do not believe that any
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could help them to feel better.
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a barrier in practice routine and affect motivation but could be solved with some inspirational influence. Basically, to believe in
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and start doing exercise, it usually needs a small illustration or example.
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, we can conclude on the
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of
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analysis that self-motivation usually is not strong enough for most
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and some external encourage required. Thereby, it will be more productive to organise groups to motivate each other or even dedicate personal trainer. But alternatively and with
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resources it is possible to use virtual trainers like
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bots, as a separate program in mobile devices or additional service inside social networks. More than that, combining electronic trainers with training groups could lead to sharing achievements and results via some kind of leaderboards and provide multiplied involvement effect.
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, I can state that recommendations from doctors may be somehow attractive but it’s not mandatory so could be ignored
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a lot of reasons.
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way, to make recommended physical activity inspirational, there should be an external motivator added with examples, graphs, triggering events and social
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