Some believe that younger family members should be legally responsible for supporting older family members when they become physically, mentally and financially unable to look after themselves. Do you agree or disagree?

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younger family

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and are responsible to support them mentally, physically and financially when they are unable to look after themselves. I believe that

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it is everyone's

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parents or grandparents once they become older and cannot look after themselves but many

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to take that

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their own due to

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globalisation. Everyone agrees that after a certain

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our parents and grandparents become weak and less

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by physical, mentally and financially and it is our

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to look after themselves because they are unable to work and earn

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their own. So younger family

members

should support and

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the need of their parents or grandparents whether it is about medication or other expenses.

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world, many younger people

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to look after their older family

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because they travel all over the world due to business purpose and employment. Other than that, many of them do not have stability in their job or need to stay away from their families so it becomes quite tough for everyone to look

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both things simultaneously. For that

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, many younger people hire

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care takers

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for their older family

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so that they can stay home safely under the observation of

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even if their children

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far away from their home. To sum up

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