Some believe that younger family members should be legally responsible for supporting older family members when they become physically, mentally and financially unable to look after themselves. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many argue that older family
members
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should be taken
care
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younger family
members
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and are responsible to support them mentally, physically and financially when they are unable to look after themselves. I believe that
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it is everyone's
responsibility
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to take
care
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their
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parents or grandparents once they become older and cannot look after themselves but many
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to take that
responsibility
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by
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their own due to
the
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globalisation. Everyone agrees that after a certain
ages
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our parents and grandparents become weak and less
concious
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conscious
by physical, mentally and financially and it is our
responsibility
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to look after themselves because they are unable to work and earn
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their own. So younger family
members
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should support and
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fulfil
the need of their parents or grandparents whether it is about medication or other expenses.
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fastest growing
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world, many younger people
fails
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to look after their older family
members
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because they travel all over the world due to business purpose and employment. Other than that, many of them do not have stability in their job or need to stay away from their families so it becomes quite tough for everyone to look
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both things simultaneously. For that
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, many younger people hire
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caretakers
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care takers
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caretakers
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for their older family
members
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so that they can stay home safely under the observation of
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caretakers
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care takers
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even if their children
stays
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far away from their home. To sum up
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, people should understand their
responsibility
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towards their older family
members
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and support themselves in their crucial stage of life whether they live with their families or stay away from
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them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • filial piety
  • elder care
  • aging population
  • public resources
  • state welfare
  • financial burden
  • legal mandate
  • family dynamics
  • moral responsibility
  • residency
  • integrity
  • dependency
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