In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government has the responsibility to solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Obesity has become a major cause of disease among the young generation.
Children
prefer fast foods to healthy choices. This
has become a cause for concern, thus
adequate steps should be taken to tackle the problem. I believe a combined effort of both parents
and government
can solve the crisis.
Firstly
, parents
are the ones who can influence children
from a young age. They have the power to control the child’s food
choices. From early childhood itself, they have to develop a system where kids are provided with nutritional food
. For instance
, a healthy diet should include fruits, vegetables, meat and occasionally fast food
can also
be given. They should maintain a proper balance and lead by example.
Even though parents
play a major role government
can also
exert its power to monitor the unhealthy food
choices in the market. Schools providing lunch should consult with a dietician to provide the best available option for their children
. The government
can also
take steps to check whether the preservatives added in the food
products are age-appropriate and harmful. For example
, government
intervention on Maggi production prevented companies from using preservatives with high amounts of mercury which was found to be fatal for kids. They can also
make exercise a necessary part of the curriculum and educate the children
about its various benefits.
To conclude, though the initial lessons in a healthy lifestyle start from home and parents
play a crucial role in shaping the kids, the government
can help by implementing various laws and restrictions relating to food
safety. The healthy younger generation is an essential part of the family and society so it’s our responsibility to guide them.Submitted by geosunny345 on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite