A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they shouldhave the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy theirvarious needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There has been an increase in the
amount
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of people who supports
animals
' rights while some people are against
theexploitation
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the exploitation
for human's needs.
This
essay is going to explain these two points of view and
then
give my opinion. On the one hand ,
animals
should have the same rights as humans because both are equally important for
ourplanet
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our planet
.
For instance
, we would not survive if all bees , tiny insects , were extinct.
Hence
, we should respect and
loveall
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love all
forms of life in the world since we depend on them.Cruelly killing an animal should be the same
than
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killing
ahuman
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a human
human
being.
On the other hand
, humanity needs to eat certain substances to survive,
such
as protein, which is easier to obtain
inlarge
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in large
quantities by
consumig
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consuming
the meat of
animals
such
as cows and
sheeps
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.
In addition
, since testing
chemicalsubstances
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chemical substances
such
as tablets, vaccines and etc.
animals
are needed ,
otherwise
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our
specie
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species
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would be endangered. From my point of view,
animals
can be employed by people only in order to save or improve our health.In other
casehumanity
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case humanity
would be on
stage
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of extinction. At the same
time
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we have to take care of our environment, nature ,
animals
at
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all
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and other creatures.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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