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May museum charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

#museum #charge #admission #people #museums
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water
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energy
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 and the
activity
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 which is a
cause
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 of
pollution
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. The
first
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pie
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chart
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 illustrates the
use
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 of
energy
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 by Australian
households
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 and The
second
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pie
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chart
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 presents the
use
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 of
energy
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 which releases
greenhouse
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gas
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 from various users. Overall, it can be seen that the highest
proportion
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 of
use
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 by
households
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 in Australia was
a
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apply
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heating while the highest
activity
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 which is releasing
pollution
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 was
water
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 heating. According to the
chart
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. The
proportion
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 of using by
households
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 had a heating,
water
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 heating, other
appliances
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,
refrigeration
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, lighting and cooling by 42%, approximately one of three, 15%, 7%, 4% and 2% respectively.
On the other hand
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, the
use
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 of
energy
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 which is a
cause
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 of
greenhouse
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gas
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 was a
water
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 heating
instead
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 heating which
households
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use
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 more than it followed by other
appliances
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, heating which is higher consume by household
refrigeration
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, lighting and cooling by 32%, 28%, 15%, 14%, 8% and 3% respectively.
As a result
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, there is not a relationship between the amount of using
energy
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 and the
activity
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 which is a
cause
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 of
pollution
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.
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