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The
first
pie
chart
 illustrates the
use
 of
energy
 by Australian
households
 and The
second
pie
chart
 presents the
use
 of
energy
 which releases
greenhouse
gas
 from various users. Overall, it can be seen that the highest
proportion
 of
use
 by
households
 in Australia was
a
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heating while the highest
activity
 which is releasing
pollution
 was
water
 heating. According to the
chart
. The
proportion
 of using by
households
 had a heating,
water
 heating, other
appliances
,
refrigeration
, lighting and cooling by 42%, approximately one of three, 15%, 7%, 4% and 2% respectively.
On the other hand
, the
use
 of
energy
 which is a
cause
 of
greenhouse
gas
 was a
water
 heating
instead
 heating which
households
use
 more than it followed by other
appliances
, heating which is higher consume by household
refrigeration
, lighting and cooling by 32%, 28%, 15%, 14%, 8% and 3% respectively.
As a result
, there is not a relationship between the amount of using
energy
 and the
activity
 which is a
cause
 of
pollution
. The
first
pie
chart
 illustrates the
use
 of
energy
 by Australian
households
 and The
second
pie
chart
 presents the
use
 of
energy
 which releases
greenhouse
gas
 from various users. Overall, it can be seen that the highest
proportion
 of
use
 by
households
 in Australia was
a
Remove the article
apply
show examples
heating while the highest
activity
 which is releasing
pollution
 was
water
 heating. According to the
chart
. The
proportion
 of using by
households
 had a heating,
water
 heating, other
appliances
,
refrigeration
, lighting and cooling by 42%, approximately one of three, 15%, 7%, 4% and 2% respectively.
On the other hand
, the
use
 of
energy
 which is a
cause
 of
greenhouse
gas
 was a
water
 heating
instead
 heating which
households
use
 more than it followed by other
appliances
, heating which is higher consume by household
refrigeration
, lighting and cooling by 32%, 28%, 15%, 14%, 8% and 3% respectively.
As a result
, there is not a relationship between the amount of using
energy
 and the
activity
 which is a
cause
 of
pollution
.
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