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In most countries, prison is an effective solution for the problem of crime. Some people think a more effective solution is to provide better education.

#countries #prison #crime #people #education
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criminals in the custody is a decisive factor.
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, some individuals believe that developing in
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education
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 finding a
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solution
 to resolve it . poor quality of
education
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account
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committing
crime
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 in many
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nations. providing people with effective
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education
 play a vital role in
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 the
crime
 rate in
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. The rate of crimes in the
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deprived
 area is too much high because the
children
are suffer
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 from weak
education
 and they find it difficult to finish their schools.
moreover
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children
 are forced to work from an early
ages
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 by their
parent
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 so they failed to obtain
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the qualification
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qualification
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 and they are unable to find a descend job and it can cause
they
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 turn to
crime
. the governments should invest in the
eductional
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educational
 infrustcure and impose some hefty fines for those who ban their
children
 from studying. working from an early
ages
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 can
also
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crimes. many
children
 in rural areas
compelled
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 to work ,
consequently
, they fail to obtain
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qualification
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. due to the fact these days employers are willing to recruit people who have
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credential
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, they are unable to find a job with good incoming . government should bring the parents who force their
children
 to work to trial and
severly
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severely
several
 punish them. to conclude . poor quality of
education
 and working from
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early ages contribute to
crime
 , governments can remedy
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.in my opinion investing in infrustcure and posing fines are steps in the right direction.
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