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Nowadays, because of digital technology, it is possible for not only studios but also individuals to produce their own films. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

#technology #studios #individuals #films #development
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It cannot be denied that in
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 contemporary era it is achievable to make their own broadcast not only studios but
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 for society due to technological advancements. In my
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this
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 is detrimental to a large extent. My preference is explained
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. The biggest drawback is every person has no experience of
picture making
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.
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 refers to high skills of direction and knowledge of that field. it requires
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 of money to produce
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 films or
documentory
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documentary
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addition
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 the competition has increased remarkably in these days
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 to
yester years
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. sometimes fake producers steal the concept of others by using technology. Another downside is that because of new inventions and
availability
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 of video editing software
person
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people
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 are trying to make their personal movies and sometimes they even generate uncensored video due to lack of sufficient knowledge.
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contrary
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 there are some benefits of making films.
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with
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 it is very interesting if someone creating their films. everyone has
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 chance to represent their
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talent
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instance
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 today's children
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 social media
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 as reels or tik tok in which they can easily express their skills and become an actor in the future. All in
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 it can be stated that
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 their own movies has
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 negative impact on
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individual
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 of
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in
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 skills and knowledge
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 it could bring positive for Juvenile or youth. I believe that the aim of Film making is
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to succeed
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 when
person
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a person
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have
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intimidate
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 requires expertise and proficiency.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • democratization of content
  • barriers to entry
  • media landscape
  • financial backing
  • unique perspectives
  • high-quality content
  • market saturation
  • economic impact
  • independent filmmakers
  • traditional studios
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