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Nowadays, because of digital technology, it is possible for not only studios but also individuals to produce their own films. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

#technology #studios #individuals #films #development
It cannot be denied that in
this
 contemporary era it is achievable to make their own broadcast not only studios but
also
 for society due to technological advancements. In my
viewpoint
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this
 is detrimental to a large extent. My preference is explained
further
. The biggest drawback is every person has no experience of
picture making
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.
this
 refers to high skills of direction and knowledge of that field. it requires
a lots
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 of money to produce
such
 films or
documentory
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documentary
.
In
addition
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 the competition has increased remarkably in these days
compare
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 to
yester years
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. sometimes fake producers steal the concept of others by using technology. Another downside is that because of new inventions and
availability
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 of video editing software
person
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 are trying to make their personal movies and sometimes they even generate uncensored video due to lack of sufficient knowledge.
On the
contrary
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 there are some benefits of making films.
To begin
with
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 it is very interesting if someone creating their films. everyone has
equal
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 chance to represent their
telent
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talent
.
For
instance
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 today's children
using
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 social media
such
 as reels or tik tok in which they can easily express their skills and become an actor in the future. All in
all
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 it can be stated that
produce
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 their own movies has
largely
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 negative impact on
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the individual
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individual
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as a result
 of
absence
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in
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 skills and knowledge
also
 it could bring positive for Juvenile or youth. I believe that the aim of Film making is
succeed
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 when
person
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a person
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have
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intimidate
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 requires expertise and proficiency.
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