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Demand of food is increasing worlwide. What are the causes of this? What measures can the international community take to make sure the food supply is enough?

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Due to the increase of the world populations as well as the change in the ways of
people
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's lives, the need for
food
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 is growing. There might be some
food
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 shortages in the near future.
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, there is a discussion of what strategies some international countries can possibly have in order to ensure there is adequate
food
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 for everyone. One of the
first
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 problems is that the population of our planet is increasing every year due to different factors,
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 as better medical progress, healthy
food
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, etc.
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, the population of China reached from 1 billion to 1.5 billion from 1980 to 2021, which need more
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.
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, the natural resources are constant or decreasing. As the
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 problem, individuals' habit of eating has changed nowadays since they tend to waste much of their
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.
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, in the united stated, an individual throws away ten kilograms of
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 each year, while in Africa, some
people
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 are living with less than one dollar every day. The international governments can play an important role in
food
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 shortages. One possible solution is that they can make their own citizens aware in terms of being thrifty.
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, they can organize some campaigns against wasting edible resources.
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,
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 will consume more wisely. As the
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 possible solution, they should stop expanding built-up areas, and allocate them to farming.
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, farmers can produce more
food
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 for residents. To conclude, there are different reasons that cause an increase in
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's demand for
food
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,
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 as the population and the way
people
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 consume. In order to confront
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 issue, international communities can step in with viable options
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 as increasing
people
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's awareness or keeping some areas intact for cultivating.
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