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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads? To what extent do you agree

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It is often argued that it is more advantageous to give more budget to track authorities by government rather than to roads. I completely agree with the opinion and think that line
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 a more important sector to improve their facilities and need more amount of money.
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 of all,rail
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 are covered less space and easily connect through
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difficult routes,
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,roads required whitespace and specific area to be built and are not attached easily in various tropical regions.In most of the areas
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 are not properly built and road demand's huge amount and maintenance for the complete process.
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,in many parts of the world, there
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 evidence, most of the people use train services more than other public transport.
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, railway's had connected many countries, despite their disputed borders.it shows, railways
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 spread peace and happiness towards neighbouring cities.
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, India has recently opened their new route with help of the government toward Pakistan.
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 it is important to spend
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 on railways for the country development. To conclude,I strongly believe that government should spend more budget on railways than roads, because, it makes
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 toward
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 of
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the country
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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