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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shipping. Is this a positive or a negative ?

#years #shops #customers #travel #centers #malls
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Nowadays, most
people
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 prefer going to the big shopping
malls
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 to buy products they need due to which many local businesses are shutting down. In my opinion,
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 is a positive thing in many respects.
Firstly
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,
people
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 are quite busy these days because of their hectic schedule and are not left with much time to go on shopping at the end of the weekend which is why most of them go to
malls
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 where almost everything can be bought pretty conveniently.
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, these
malls
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also
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 sell
quality
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 products and
therefore
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people
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 get to consume better commodities. Since the big shopping
malls
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 provide the benefit of convenience and buying goods of the best
quality
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, I think
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 is a positive development.
On the other hand
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, small shops and stores cannot sell all sorts of products. Customers usually have to go from one vendor to another to buy different types of things in which a lot of time is wasted. As per a survey, purchasing goods from shopping
malls
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 takes about half the total time spent in a conventional market by the customers.
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 to
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, it is not expected of every shopkeeper to have commodities of good
quality
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 but
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malls'vendors
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mall vendors
 have a responsibility of representing the mall and have to maintain its reputation due to which they cannot sell anything of low
quality
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. In conclusion, as
malls
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 these days are a convenient and time-saving option for
people
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 and not just
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 they are
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 able to buy goods of better
quality
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 from there, I am of the opinion that it is a positive trend.
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